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One morning,
Fox left his den in search of food.
He searched the ground and found nothing,
and searched the trees and found nothing,
and finally looked to the sky,
where he saw a sparrow with lovely, shining feathers.

For a while, Fox simply watched, gathering his courage,
then finally he stepped forward and called out,
"Hello!
What are you doing up there?"
Sparrow whirled and wheeled and called back,
"I am enjoying the feel of the wind in my feathers
and the sun on my back."

Then Fox asked, "Won't you come down to earth and speak to me?"
Sparrow looked at Fox's lustrous, russet fur
and thought of Fox's kind, soothing voice.
But Sparrow remembered the stories Grandfather Aesop told,
and so he also saw Fox's gleaming teeth.
"No thank you," Sparrow replied,
"For the breeze is too lovely and the sky too blue."

So Fox thought for a moment, and then said,
"Then why don't you sit on the top-most branch of that tree?
Then you can enjoy the blue sky, and still talk to me."
And Sparrow couldn't see why not,
so he flew down to the highest branch of the tree
and together Fox and Sparrow laughed and talked.

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And from then on,
every morning Fox left his den and went to the tree
and Sparrow came down from the sky.
And every day,
Fox would say to Sparrow, "Why don't you
come down one more branch? The sky is just as blue
and we will be able to hear each other better."
So every day, Sparrow hopped one branch lower.

And things went on as some things do,
and as Sparrow moved closer to the earth
he also grew closer to Fox,
until one day Fox asked Sparrow to marry him.
Sparrow ruffled his feathers with pleasure and embarrassment
and said yes.

Then on one fine spring day,
all the woodland creatures came together to celebrate.
The ceremony took place beneath garlands of
Queen Anne's Lace and Black Eyed Susans,
dandelions and daisy chains.
Choirs of birds sang hymns,
Great Horned Owl performed the union,
and Grandmother Grizzly prepared a wedding feast
of salmon and honey.

After the ceremony was over,
Fox and Sparrow met by their tree.
Sparrow perched in the lowest branch,
and Fox looked up at him adoringly, and said,
"Now that we are going to live together,
won't you come down to the earth
and join me?"
And with a smile, Sparrow did.

Fox went home happy to his den that day,
with new feathers for his pillow
and new bones to pick clean his teeth.

And the question we must ask ourselves is not,
"Why did Sparrow leave his branch?"
but rather,
"Why did Fox wait so long for his meal?"
WOO HOO! MORE ORAL LITERATURE!

I created my own fable :) This was fun. I was inspired by today's NaPoWriMo prompt, and by Peter Gabriel's Down to Earth (from the end credits of Wall-e!). Composed for my 100 Poem Project! :D

I had fun creating an Aesop-esque fable, but I tried turning it on its head a little bit. See if you can figure out how ;)

Not entirely sure about how smoothly this reads. Oral literature is so different from simply prose or poetry, but I was still definitely trying to write a poem. Any comments to this effect are greatly appreciated.

I'm also worried about the flow in general, in terms of the balance of story and imagery. Thoughts?

All comments welcome! :heart:

PS. YES, SPARROW AND FOX ARE BOTH MALE. The point of the story isn't their sexuality.
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ActsofArt Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is pretty good! I thought it flowed well and I liked the story it reminded me a little bit of the spider and the fly; and old story I read somewhere.
oh and the gingerbread man one where the fox tricks him.
Anyway well done!
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha thanks very much :)
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simplyfeel Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And I was just about to full-on ship them! Great poem! The flow was excellent and I can't tell you how much I enjoyed it. Just so good. I was very much entertained.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha so glad you like it :)
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous, and so inspired.

I've sometimes thought that when you love someone so all-consumingly, you love them so much that you could consume them...
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you.

Ooooooooooh, now that's a cool idea.
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HtBlack Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
The only conclusion I have is that the fox did love the sparrow, but his instinct was too strong. And I think this happens in some other fable out there, which is probably why I came to that conclusion. :paranoid:
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha ^^ cool.
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
" Fox went home happy to his den that day,
with new feathers for his pillow
and new bones to pick clean his teeth."


scary. i like the poem but i can't seem to hit the :+fav: button because it scares me a lot. the planning and manipulation the Fox did to the Sparrow and the cannibalism at the end, it's like an Anthony Hopkins' movie. the art of killing, you write so well.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha. Thank you. Just keep in mind, it's not two humans, it's a fox and a sparrow!

I'm glad you like it :)
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