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You are verging on knife edges, wild youth:
The pricking of the blade in your bare steps
Marks trees of paper cuts, spells out the truth
that like lime juice keeps the wounds fresh -
You're not yet the person you'll want to be,
And that boy 'cross the room for whom you long,
Wild youth, will swallow you down like sweet tea;
You must feel your bones curled 'round, and all wrong.
Tightrope walker, do not let yourself slide -
Sense the vice-fear like spikes beneath your skin;
Use them well, cliff-walker, toughen your hide,
cling still to the walls, hide even from winds.
Hold - hold, for a boy who shall not, Grendel-
like, crush you warm and wet, small and spindle'd.
The pricking of the blade in your bare steps
Marks trees of paper cuts, spells out the truth
that like lime juice keeps the wounds fresh -
You're not yet the person you'll want to be,
And that boy 'cross the room for whom you long,
Wild youth, will swallow you down like sweet tea;
You must feel your bones curled 'round, and all wrong.
Tightrope walker, do not let yourself slide -
Sense the vice-fear like spikes beneath your skin;
Use them well, cliff-walker, toughen your hide,
cling still to the walls, hide even from winds.
Hold - hold, for a boy who shall not, Grendel-
like, crush you warm and wet, small and spindle'd.
UGH, Sonnet, I HATE YOU. I'm so terrible at fixed-form poetry, but convinced me it was time to have another go at a sonnet, so here I am.
It SHOULD have been:
An ironic sonnet.
Not about love.
Using one of the five senses in a new and inventive way.
Not mentioning any body parts.
I think generally I did pretty well. Except for all the places I didn't....SONNETS ARE HARD. I guess I tried to make a sonnet about why a young person shouldn't fall in love....? That's ironic, right...? And I think I mostly just ended up focusing on one sense (touch).
Gah, for me just getting rhyming and iambic pentameter was hard. RAWRAAWRAWR
Anywho...enjoy?
Critique for #lacoterie :[link]
It SHOULD have been:
An ironic sonnet.
Not about love.
Using one of the five senses in a new and inventive way.
Not mentioning any body parts.
I think generally I did pretty well. Except for all the places I didn't....SONNETS ARE HARD. I guess I tried to make a sonnet about why a young person shouldn't fall in love....? That's ironic, right...? And I think I mostly just ended up focusing on one sense (touch).
Gah, for me just getting rhyming and iambic pentameter was hard. RAWRAAWRAWR
Anywho...enjoy?
Critique for #lacoterie :[link]
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This is fantastic! Sonnets. are hard. blaaah. I tried to do one again the other night for the first time in months, just, oi. Rhymes. This is wonderful though! With sonnets, I often find the good ones need to be read a few times to fully understand. This was no exception. Each read through I understood more, and appreciated every word you chose. Really great.