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She creates and destroys
in the same breath,
a cardboard figure
molding clay with her tongue
and her thick thighs.
She hums a storm down on your head.
[da, da, da, da.]
The clouds—silk
cutout shapes—
bend and stretch
against the sky.
There is no hardness
anymore.
[da da da da]
The dandelions are
fragile to the touch,
a single breath blows
their puffs away.
She gathers them in her arms
and tries to turn them yellow again.
[da
da
da
da]
The war begins and ends
with a minute of radio silence.
Days fall like yellow weeds.
In this endless wind
even the stones are only
silhouettes.
But she can bend them with her fists.
[da
da
da
da.]
in the same breath,
a cardboard figure
molding clay with her tongue
and her thick thighs.
She hums a storm down on your head.
[da, da, da, da.]
The clouds—silk
cutout shapes—
bend and stretch
against the sky.
There is no hardness
anymore.
[da da da da]
The dandelions are
fragile to the touch,
a single breath blows
their puffs away.
She gathers them in her arms
and tries to turn them yellow again.
[da
da
da
da]
The war begins and ends
with a minute of radio silence.
Days fall like yellow weeds.
In this endless wind
even the stones are only
silhouettes.
But she can bend them with her fists.
[da
da
da
da.]
WHY does poetry not get a "philosophical" category??? I had to make do.
Hooray for Sartre and Beauvoir. They are awesome
written today as my FIRST poem in my 100 poem challenge, for We Will Become Silhouettes. I didn't really mean to do the first on the list first, it just happened. I could still use some topic suggestions!!!
based off The Postal Service's version of We Will Become Silhouettes, cuz that's what my partner suggested.
A couple thoughts for critique:
what do you think of the little "da-da"s? too random? Or does it fit as a kind of chorus?
How well does the imagery fit together? Is it too spastic?
any suggestions for a title? I kinda hate this one.
Hooray for Sartre and Beauvoir. They are awesome
written today as my FIRST poem in my 100 poem challenge, for We Will Become Silhouettes. I didn't really mean to do the first on the list first, it just happened. I could still use some topic suggestions!!!
based off The Postal Service's version of We Will Become Silhouettes, cuz that's what my partner suggested.
A couple thoughts for critique:
what do you think of the little "da-da"s? too random? Or does it fit as a kind of chorus?
How well does the imagery fit together? Is it too spastic?
any suggestions for a title? I kinda hate this one.
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