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I wish I had been born like George Sand
with all the courage of trousers
to grasp you, a Chopin with your sweet fingers.

But I am a girl beneath my petticoats;
I long to tangle my white-gloved fingers
In the folds of your cravat,
Like oceans meeting,
But I grasp instead the swan neck of my
Lace parasol, like an anchor.

Love, break open my steel rib cage
And make of me a poet,
Make my snarled letters into kisses
And their thorned brambles bloom roses.
A fun piece I wrote for Lili's 26th birthday contest!

Victorian period, obviously :) The beginning kind of just came to me, and I have to say it flowed fairly nicely from there. All comments/critiques appreciated! I'd particularly like to know if any part of it is too jarring or doesn't make sense :/

Also: this definitely still isn't finished. I thought about mentioning something about a silent courtship in a final paragraph, but I just don't know....is it finished as is? Does it need more?
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chapaV Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Very nice indeed. If you really want to continue it, consider adding a second part or episode, roman numeral style. I don't think it needs more direct stanzas though. Or does it? Lol I can't decide either.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm. Okay, I'll think about it ^^

Glad you like!
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
I absolutely think this is brilliant. I also think that it is unfinished. Though, I'm unsure if that is because it needs more, or just because I want more. =p
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha. Thank you ^^ You're the best.
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