Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
I wish I had been born like George Sand
with all the courage of trousers
to grasp you, a Chopin with your sweet fingers.

But I am a girl beneath my petticoats;
I long to tangle my white-gloved fingers
In the folds of your cravat,
Like oceans meeting,
But I grasp instead the swan neck of my
Lace parasol, like an anchor.

Love, break open my steel rib cage
And make of me a poet,
Make my snarled letters into kisses
And their thorned brambles bloom roses.
A fun piece I wrote for Lili's 26th birthday contest!

Victorian period, obviously :) The beginning kind of just came to me, and I have to say it flowed fairly nicely from there. All comments/critiques appreciated! I'd particularly like to know if any part of it is too jarring or doesn't make sense :/

Also: this definitely still isn't finished. I thought about mentioning something about a silent courtship in a final paragraph, but I just don't it finished as is? Does it need more?
Add a Comment:
chapaV Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Very nice indeed. If you really want to continue it, consider adding a second part or episode, roman numeral style. I don't think it needs more direct stanzas though. Or does it? Lol I can't decide either.
AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm. Okay, I'll think about it ^^

Glad you like!
Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
I absolutely think this is brilliant. I also think that it is unfinished. Though, I'm unsure if that is because it needs more, or just because I want more. =p
AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha. Thank you ^^ You're the best.
Add a Comment:

:iconazizriandaoxrak: More from AzizrianDaoXrak

Featured in Collections

Treasured Literature by LadyLincoln

Lovely Literature by witwitch

Literature Faves by Richard-M-Williams

More from DeviantArt


Submitted on
November 21, 2013
File Size
460 bytes


15 (who?)


Creative Commons License
Some rights reserved. This work is licensed under a
Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 License.